![]() "Joe Leonard of 1UP.com noted that the game's humor and over-the-top gameplay help to calm frustrations regarding the difficulty.OXM UK and US, while both called just "Official Xbox Magazine" and sharing an owning company, are entirely different magazines, with different reviewers."Official Xbox Magazine (UK)'s Mike Channel appreciated the variety found in each set of levels." Why do you note the location here?.The first paragraph of the Reception section didn't seem to flow that well for me, but I can't think of any good ways to fix it. Finished reading the article, other than some small word choice or punctuation issues I think the article is fine.No worries about not being familiar with video game articles an FA is supposed to be accessible to all readers, not just video game article editors. Thanks for the review! Addressed all of these concerns I find the "noun+ing" constructions hard to spot, so thanks for the link to Tony's guide on them."They felt the replay feature transformed death in the game into a form of reward." I think you could probably cut out "in the game" here.Is the Commander Video you mention in the article the same as Commander Video? Maybe link him if it is.The player may control characters other than Meat Boy, many of whom first appeared in other independent video games." Maybe note examples of the other games here? "These warp zones feature bonus levels that have either the art style of older video games and a limit of three lives, or are patterned after another indie video game."They had four months' worth of work left to complete on the game, so, for the final two months, they worked daily, slept five hours a night, and frequently forgot to eat-a process that McMillen said he "would never voluntarily go through" again." What do you think about rephrasing this so it's a shorter sentence/has less punctuation?.Check for the use of the noun + -ing construction.Check the use of "Due to" vs "Because of".I'm not familiar with video game articles (and am a beginner at FAC) so I can't comment too much on some aspects of this. Comments from Mark Arsten at 03:38, 20 January 2012 (UTC): Alright, the article looks pretty good to me.Thanks for reviewing! I agree with your change, as well.Truly an excellent article! Inter change able| talk to me 01:07, 20 January 2012 (UTC) Reply I only had to make one minor change to the article for grammar, and it wasn't really even grammar-related. ![]() Thanks for reviewing! - Pres N 21:12, 19 January 2012 (UTC) Reply.Tezero ( talk) 21:12, 19 January 2012 (UTC) Reply ![]() Anyway, it looks to be in good condition.
0 Comments
Leave a Reply. |
AuthorWrite something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview. ArchivesCategories |